On the hydrangeas
the weight of the morning sun
the evening sun
---Otsuyu
I love the sensory images but think that the last line could be shortened up a bit.
thanks for the suggestion! did a little revising -- :-)
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I love the sensory images but think that the last line could be shortened up a bit.
thanks for the suggestion! did a little revising -- :-)
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