On the hydrangeas
the weight of the morning sun
the evening sun
---Otsuyu
The jammies haiku is soooo neat. I always thought "jammies" was British slang, so really nice to see it used here.all my best,AlanThe With Words International Online Haiku Competition 2010: weblink to competition page.
Thanks, Alan. I removed (and changed) the second haiku which really didn't belong with the first (writing too late at night to make good editing decisions!) And "p.j.s" just didn't work!
..yea, i saw that you split them up..the uniformity (there's muchuniformity in your haiku) and thejammies makes it shine..>>sp
Thank you so much, Spiros.
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The jammies haiku is soooo neat. I always thought "jammies" was British slang, so really nice to see it used here.
all my best,
Alan
The With Words International Online Haiku Competition 2010: weblink to competition page
.
Thanks, Alan. I removed (and changed) the second haiku which really didn't belong with the first (writing too late at night to make good editing decisions!)
And "p.j.s" just didn't work!
..yea, i saw that you split them
up..the uniformity (there's much
uniformity in your haiku) and the
jammies makes it shine..>>sp
Thank you so much, Spiros.
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