On the hydrangeas

the weight of the morning sun

the evening sun


I am defined by sunlight
dissolved by the
grey swell of cloud

Photo Grey Cloud Blue Sky by roujo


Reihaisha said...

I enjoyed it, David.

John McDonald said...

me too

Vida said...

The haiku was powerful enough by itself, but the picture is beautiful :)

diana l. said...

Using "I" in haiku is, I think, new for you. I love how it's deeply imbedded in the experience of nature. This is strong and beautiful.

(The placement of the word "the" has me stuck. Do you think it would work better at the beginning of the third line?)

(I'm also realizing that dropping "I am" could also work, but being a Westerner, I like it better with the subject explicit. :) )