On the hydrangeas
the weight of the morning sun
the evening sun
---Otsuyu
I really like this!I wonder if you really need the pivot line?morning dewstretched across a fieldmy footprints ormorning dewstretched across a fieldof my footprints Either way, a really good haiku!Have you considered submitting to Notes from the Gean?Deadline has been extended to September 14th.Notes from the Gean new editors details: Notes from the Gean new editorsall my best,Alan
..this one's a pleasure to read;quite excellent..>>spiros
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I really like this!
I wonder if you really need the pivot line?
morning dew
stretched across a field
my footprints
or
morning dew
stretched across a field
of my footprints
Either way, a really good haiku!
Have you considered submitting to Notes from the Gean?
Deadline has been extended to September 14th.
Notes from the Gean new editors details:
Notes from the Gean new editors
all my best,
Alan
..this one's a pleasure to read;
quite excellent..>>spiros
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