On the hydrangeas

the weight of the morning sun

the evening sun


---Otsuyu


dinner on the porch
we watch the rabbits eat too
soft, silent rain falls

2 comments:

Alan Summers said...

I love "soft, silent rain falls".

dinner on the porch
we watch the rabbits eat too
soft, silent rain falls


maybe...

dinner on the porch
as we watch the rabbits -
soft, silent rain falls


??

all my best,

Alan

Dymphna said...

Thanks, Alan. I like your revision better, I think.