On the hydrangeas
the weight of the morning sun
the evening sun
Really like this, just one suggestion for line two.a day you promisedto not leave me foreverfeels like yesterdayin my cabinet, a box fullof our memorabilialook forward to more tanka! ;-)AlanAlan’s Area 17 blog.
Thank you, Alan. Is there any difference in line two?WWB
Well spotted!I meant to suggest:a day you promisednot to leave me foreverfeels like yesterdayin my cabinet, a box fullof our memorabiliaJust switching "not" and "to" around in the second line.Terrific tanka! ;-)all my best,Alanblog: Alan’s Area 17 blogwebsite: With Words.
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