On the hydrangeas

the weight of the morning sun

the evening sun


---Otsuyu



hot dry river beds
fire scorched plants wilt at birth
mother earth ignores

5 comments:

Dennis Tomlinson said...

Very intense images!

David said...

Melanie - your haiku got me thinking. I hope you don't mind

hot dry river bed
scorched Lomandra and Acacia -
the indifferent earth

Best wishes

David

Cassiopeia Rises said...

David I except any and all suggestions. Your words ring truer then mine, Much thanks.

Melanie

Cassiopeia Rises said...

Thank you Dennis for your comments. I am glad you liked it.

Melanie

David said...

Melanie I've posted the revised haiku on my blog and sited you as co writer.

I've also put a link to you haiku on the Four Seasons sight.

Here is a link to it: www.conjuringsunlight.blogspot.com

If you are at all unhappy with the post just let me know and I'll remove it.

Thanks and cheers

David