On the hydrangeas
the weight of the morning sun
the evening sun
---Otsuyu
Love the “dancing breeze”! I wish you quick recovery!
Thanks Vida:) Nothing so terrible, a fractured ankle, but so terribly boring -six weeks in plaster!
Yikes! I think you need to visit an onsen, are there any in England, or maybe a nice visit to a ryokan or two in Japan maybe? A delicious problem. ;-)
Glad to know you are recovering, B. No reason to stop writing nice pieces...
..Beatrice..>>wishing you aspeedy recovery..i like the haiku too but feel that thecomma in L2 is too mild abreak; a semicolon or anem dash would serve the poembetter, me thinks..>>spiros---------------------
Thanks, Alan, Wahyu, and Spiros I agree about the comma, thanks!
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Love the “dancing breeze”! I wish you quick recovery!
Thanks Vida:) Nothing so terrible, a fractured ankle, but so terribly boring -six weeks in plaster!
Yikes! I think you need to visit an onsen, are there any in England, or maybe a nice visit to a ryokan or two in Japan maybe?
A delicious problem. ;-)
Glad to know you are recovering, B. No reason to stop writing nice pieces...
..Beatrice..>>wishing you a
speedy recovery..i like the
haiku too but feel that the
comma in L2 is too mild a
break; a semicolon or an
em dash would serve the poem
better, me thinks..>>spiros
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Thanks, Alan, Wahyu, and Spiros I agree about the comma, thanks!
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